der "wichtige frage thread"

[forvert]

Gibt es bei der NFL eine World Series?

hab gestern Silver Linings gesehen und im Zusammenhang mit der NFL wurden die World Series erwähnt... hab mir gedacht, die gibts nur bei der MLB?

hab den film vor einem jahr gesehen, also weiß ich das nicht mehr so genau, aber hier (punkt 10) wird von den nlcs gesprochen.

[Devil Jin]

Habe mir einen neuen Fernseher gekauft. Jetzt wollte ich fragen ob es möglich ist die Fernbedienung vom Fernseher auch bei meinem SAT-Reciever zu verwenden.

Fernseher: http://www.amazon.de/Samsung-UE46F6890-3D-LED-Backlight-Fernseher-Sprachsteuerung-schwarz/dp/B00BMKARP0/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&qid=1387195288&sr=8-2&keywords=samsung+6890

Sat-Reciever: Protek 9760HD

Das steht normalerweise in der Betriebsanleitung oder auf der Fernbedienung existieren SAT/TV o.ä. Knöpfe.

[pironi]

Bezüglich Blue-Ray-Player: Habe mich jetzt für den LG BP430 entschieden. Bekommt recht gute Noten bei den Tests (vor allem auf Amazon).

Ist derzeit bei Conrad mit 69 Euro im Angebot. Da werde ich morgen zuschlagen.

http://geizhals.at/lg-electronics-bp430-schwarz-a927393.html

[BAS]

Gibt es bei der NFL eine World Series?

hab gestern Silver Linings gesehen und im Zusammenhang mit der NFL wurden die World Series erwähnt... hab mir gedacht, die gibts nur bei der MLB?

Bei Oblivion ist mir auch sowas aufgefallen.

[max092]

Wertes ASB, ich brauche eure Hilfe:

Ein guter Freund von mir muss fürs studium, ein assignment schreiben, gut, er hat mir den Text (350 Wörter) geschickt, um ihn korrektur zu lesen, aber da ich selbst nicht der beste in englisch bin, und ich ihm so gut wie möglich helfen will, dachte ich mir, hier sind sicher einige eglish brains

Wäre echt leiwand, wenn sich wer den Text durchlesen und vl auf grammatik und/oder satzbau fehler anschauen könnte. Wäre Top, vote, bzw mache ja auch immer bei allen möglichen umfragen (wie oft ich wohl schon für taboga gevotet hab? ) mit, danke mighty asb!

Edit: ob der Inhalt passt, kann ich selber nicht beurteilen, da der Text wahrscheinlich auf irgendeinen Artikel bezogen ist..

Text:

Our written assignment is about the BES (Business Equipment and Systems) company, their new sales manager Nigel Fraser and the sales team which includes John the „good friend“, but weak sales performer, Eliana the good performer but she feels, that she is in the wrong department, Martin, the „arrogant star“, Anna the shy hard worker, Denise the stable and sometimes aggressiv women in the sales department, Robert the creative team worker and Markus the inconsistent sales man. After the decision of the management , the previous sales manager Vanessa Bryant moved to a senior management position.

Nigel Fraser worked for a business equipment chain, he is very smart and wise although he is in a very young age, he thinks, that the current sales team needs to be controlled more tightly, because the sales performance under Vanessa Bryant was weak and slightly below expactation. The causes of this sales misery has different faces. First of all no one of the sales team takes responsibility for the mistakes in the sales department, another big point in the negativ list of the performance of the sales team is the work in team. The members don‘t support and help each other when there are some problems, there is no teamspirit in the sales department. Also Nigel Fraser as the new head of the sales department won’t accepted from the team, many members provoke Nigel with sentences like: „Everyting was better with Vanessa Bryant“ or „Where are the good old times?“

In my mind it is very crucial, to form a new team spirit in this department, many colleages have different personal problems with each other for example Markus dislikes Denise and has an arrogant view against Anna. The whole sales team, also the head Nigel should visit a teambuilding camp, all personal problems should be solved in this camp. Also the colleagues which want to change the different intern sales departments should get a chance to do this.

In my opinion the whole sales team should have on big sales target. If all intern departments just have one big target, all employees are under one roof and have the same target, if they would reach it, they get an extra bonus.

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[Chemical neighborhood]

Bin kein Englisch Experte

Letzter Absatz

"whole sales team should have one big sales target"

außerdem kommt in 2 Sätzen 3x target vor. Liest sich komisch.

ich find 1. Absatz merkwürdig find, der Satz will ned enden

E: Beistrichsetzung stimmt auch nicht ganz

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[#25]

was für ein studium is das? vom stilistischen her is das nicht sehr berauschend, da könnt man noch einiges verändern (linkers fehlen fast komplett zb). aber ka inwiefern das relevant is. habs kurz überflogen und von den ganz groben fehlern is mir aufgefallen:

agressiv -> agressive

expactetion -> expectation

The cause of this misery has different faces (klingt trotzdem komisch, aber nach mehrzahl (causes) gehört auf jeden fall kein "has")

negativ list = negative list

work in team = teamwork

when there are some problems = when problems occur

nigel fraser wont accepted from the team = macht garkeinen sinn, eher iwas in die richtung von "nigel fraser seems not to be accepted in the team, as many of his team members provoke.." oä, ka so in die richtung irgendwas. aber wont accepted is definitiv falsch

colleages: colleagues

arrogant view against = existiert nicht wirklich, eher "Denise has a negative attitude towards Anna"

on = one (aber statt should have eher "focus on")

wie gsagt nur ganz grob. da gibts definitiv noch sehr viel zu verbessern. aber ka wie genau das sprachliche benotet wird. an den beistrichen muss der freund ( ) auf jeden fall noch gehörig arbeiten.

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[Splinta]

Wertes ASB, ich brauche eure Hilfe:

Ein guter Freund von mir muss fürs studium, ein assignment schreiben, gut, er hat mir den Text (350 Wörter) geschickt, um ihn korrektur zu lesen, aber da ich selbst nicht der beste in englisch bin, und ich ihm so gut wie möglich helfen will, dachte ich mir, hier sind sicher einige eglish brains

Wäre echt leiwand, wenn sich wer den Text durchlesen und vl auf grammatik und/oder satzbau fehler anschauen könnte. Wäre Top, vote, bzw mache ja auch immer bei allen möglichen umfragen (wie oft ich wohl schon für taboga gevotet hab? ) mit, danke mighty asb!

Edit: ob der Inhalt passt, kann ich selber nicht beurteilen, da der Text wahrscheinlich auf irgendeinen Artikel bezogen ist..

Text:

Our written assignment is about the BES (Business Equipment and Systems) company, their new sales manager Nigel Fraser and the sales team which includes John the „good friend“, but weak sales performer, Eliana the good performer but she feels, that she is in the wrong department, Martin, the „arrogant star“, Anna the shy hard worker, Denise the stable and sometimes aggressiv women in the sales department, Robert the creative team worker and Markus the inconsistent sales man. After the decision of the management , the previous sales manager Vanessa Bryant moved to a senior management position.

Nigel Fraser worked for a business equipment chain, he is very smart and wise although he is in a very young age, he thinks, that the current sales team needs to be controlled more tightly, because the sales performance under Vanessa Bryant was weak and slightly below expactation. The causes of this sales misery has different faces. First of all no one of the sales team takes responsibility for the mistakes in the sales department, another big point in the negativ list of the performance of the sales team is the work in team. The members don‘t support and help each other when there are some problems, there is no teamspirit in the sales department. Also Nigel Fraser as the new head of the sales department won’t accepted from the team, many members provoke Nigel with sentences like: „Everyting was better with Vanessa Bryant“ or „Where are the good old times?“

In my mind it is very crucial, to form a new team spirit in this department, many colleages have different personal problems with each other for example Markus dislikes Denise and has an arrogant view against Anna. The whole sales team, also the head Nigel should visit a teambuilding camp, all personal problems should be solved in this camp. Also the colleagues which want to change the different intern sales departments should get a chance to do this.

In my opinion the whole sales team should have on big sales target. If all intern departments just have one big target, all employees are under one roof and have the same target, if they would reach it, they get an extra bonus.

Word Rechtschreibprüfung

[#25]

Word Rechtschreibprüfung

not sheriff serious

[FAK-masteR]

probeler approved

[max092]

Danke für die Bisherigen Antworten, wie gesagt, vom Inhalt hab ich leider auch überhaupt keine Ahnung, ich weis nur, dass es sich auf irgendeinen Artikel bezieht, Studium: gesundheitsmanagement.

Danke 25er auf jeden Fall für deine ausführliche Antwort, werd mal schauen, was ich noch korrigieren kann..

[FAK-masteR]

was ich noch sagen würde: colleagues who und everything (h fehlt)

[max092]

Vielleicht fällt euch noch was ein

Text:

Our written assignment is about the BES (Business Equipment and Systems) company, their new sales manager Nigel Fraser and the sales team, which includes John the „good friend“, but weak sales performer, Eliana the good performer, but she feels, that she is in the wrong department, Martin, the „arrogant star“, Anna the shy hard worker, Denise the stable and sometimes aggressive women in the sales department, Robert the creative team worker, and Markus the inconsistent sales man. After the decision of the management, the previous sales manager Vanessa Bryant moved to a senior management position.

Nigel Fraser worked for a business equipment chain, he is very smart and wise although he is in a very young age, he thinks, that the current sales team needs to be controlled more tightly, because the sales performance under Vanessa Bryant was weak and slightly below expectation. The causes of this sales misery are easy to indentify. First of all no one of the sales team takes responsibility for the mistakes in the sales department, another big negativ point is the teamwork. The members don‘t support and help each other when problems occur. There is no teamspirit in the sales department. Also the head Nigel Fraser seems not to be accepted in the team. Many members provoke Nigel with sentences like: „Everything was better with Vanessa Bryant“ or „Where are the good old times?“

In my mind it is very crucial, to form a new team spirit in this department, many colleagues have different personal problems with each other. For example Markus dislikes Denise and has an arrogant attitude towards Anna. The whole sales team, also the head Nigel, should visit a teambuilding camp. All personal problems should be solved in this camp. Also the colleague who wants to change the different intern sales departments should get a chance to do this.

In my opinion it’s important that the sales team has one big sales target. If all intern departments just have one big target, all employees are under „one roof“ and have the same motivation to reach it. If they would reach it, they get an extra bonus.

[#25]

-) "eliana the good performer, but she feels" klingt komisch., vl. eher "the good performer, who although feels that she..."

-) im letzten absatz kommt 2x hintereinander should vor, also "should visit a teambuilding camp" durch iwas ersetzen wie "the whole sales team would be well advised to visit a team building camp"

-) letzter satz is auch komisch (if they would reach it), eher "in case of reaching it, they would receive an extra bonus" (get is meistens eher ugssprachlich)

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[anonymo]

Wo finde ich den Post von #25er bezüglich "Scientists reported xx is a faggot." ?